Comments on: Mystery Contest for Halloween 2009

By: Grace

Grace — Sun, 03 Apr 2011 16:33:32 +0000

I then heard the door open. It was Jake. “Hey! I’m home!” he said. I went into the den. “Whats your problem?” he asked innosently. I didn’t know what to do. I finnaly said it.” Jake, I found a picture today. A really freaky picture. There was this with a black dress on and she wearing a lockit. And you were standing next to her. What’s up with that?” “I’m not sure I’m following you directly? Show me what you found.” he said. We both went into Jake’s room. “I took the photo out of the drawer. I turned around to find Jake holding a garbage bag over my head! “Lights out!” he said while soffocating me with a clorophorm rag. I hit my head as he shoved me into the bag. When I woke up I was in the basement. “Jake! Jake!” I screamed. “You called.” he said. “What are you? WHO are you?” I asked. “Thats the thing. I’m something that you hate. I’m something that you fear. I’m not real at all, Steph. I’m dead. That lady you saw in the picture. That was my best friend. She killed me. So I killed her. I possed her into jumping off a cliff. I’t was payback. Do you understand?” he asked me. “Yes. But why did you tie me up?” I asked. “Because you know the truth. And because you know the truth I’m afraid you have to leave the physicill world and go to the spirit world.” he replied. “You mean your going to k-k-kill me!?!” I screamed. He nodded and I screamed as he killed me. “Ahhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!” I screamed as I woke up. It was all a dream. I went into Jakes room and I found the photo. I looked at my calender. It was 2015. Turns out, I was dead for 14 years.

By: mystery gril5

mystery gril5 — Sun, 27 Mar 2011 21:08:30 +0000

Wow! This is a very grand story. This is just my opion but it could use more detail, of example what exactually did Jack mean when he said death was her fate.

By: Anonymous

Anonymous — Wed, 04 Aug 2010 02:01:20 +0000

i agree

By: clare2090

clare2090 — Wed, 04 Aug 2010 02:00:19 +0000

this book is so awesome!

By: flame166

flame166 — Wed, 04 Aug 2010 02:00:00 +0000

i agree clare

By: TJ

TJ — Sat, 24 Oct 2009 19:57:38 +0000

but how could it be Jake, Jen? he wouldn’t still be alive would he? no it was impossible right? well Jen you have to help me I don’t know what to do I was freaking out breathing heavy on the phone Jen told me to calm down I couldn’t turn my eye’s off the photo how could Jake still be around when he was from 1897 at that moment I heard the front door open I threw the package where he had it and told Jen that I would call her back she told me to be careful I hung up the phone and whent in the front room Jake was taking off his coat I stood there like I was lost in thought What’s the matter with you? he asked. I gave a fake laugh nothing is wrong with me I said. he looked at me and droped the subject we where quite then he said you saw the photo’s didn’t you you whent in my room I had to Jake I was doing you’re laundry I fond it on accident I swear he stood there his body was shaking since you know you have to dessapear Jake no what are you going to do to me? I asked with tears running down my face you whern’t ment to find that package and now I’m afraid death is you’re fate

By: halloween costumes

halloween costumes — Wed, 21 Oct 2009 03:58:40 +0000

Interesting. Keeping the halloween spirit alive..cheers